David's Adventures Episode 1: The Desert(Not a Forum Game)

LittleZbot · Post by **LittleZbot** » Thu Jul 15, 2010 3:50 am

Hello. I just now made up a new series starring David the Adventurer. This is not a Wonderland Series, a Game maker series, or whatever. It is a STORY series, made up completely by me.

OK, first, I'd like to introduce you to the stars of the Series:

David:

David is the Big Star. The Main Star. Whatever. He is 13, is skilled in hunting, fishing, building, Technology, and... basically survival. He loves to build especially. He is a loyal friend and usually thinks of other people first. He also loves to read, preferably Survival books. It's a good thing, too, because he's always getting into bad situations. He also has a crush on a girl named Ella.

Ella:

Ella is loving, kind, and quite pretty. She is loyal and, like David, usually thinks of others first. She is good at Sewing, cooking, dancing, fashion, singing, painting and reading. Her pretty-ness makes her a usual target for baddies. In other words, she has a knack for getting Kidnapped. She also has a crush on David.

Lenard:

Lenard(nicknamed "Lenny") is David's best friend. He's very good at Hunting. He is also a skilled-well, let's face it-video game player(Although that isn't exactly very useful). He is a Loyal friend and brother, just like Ella and David. He is somewhat good at fishing, but not much.

Leonard:

Leonard(nicknamed "Leo") is exactly like his Twin brother, Lenard. Except he is an exceptional Fisher and a somewhat, but not highly, skilled Hunter.

OK, soon I'll give out the First chapter.

TheoX · Post by **TheoX** » Thu Jul 15, 2010 12:34 pm

Sounds very nice, looking forward to the story.

LittleZbot · Post by **LittleZbot** » Thu Jul 15, 2010 9:24 pm

Thank you. I changed a few things in the descriptions and am now working on the first Chapter.

LittleZbot · Post by **LittleZbot** » Fri Jul 16, 2010 3:44 am

Sorry for almost no paragraph bondries(or whatever), I'm not so good at that.

Chapter 1: The Plane Ride

David was Bored. There was nothing to do. He was on a plane ride, going to California. His best friend Lenard(aka Lenny) was desperately searching online, hoping that he could find an online-playable video game. His Brother Leonard(aka Leo) was sleeping heavily. Actually, he didn't have to look to see that. He recognized the snores. Ten more minutes of that and I'll go deaf. David thought as he put on Earphones to muffle the sound. He looked at his watch. TWO HOURS?!!! It seems like Twenty. he said to himself. Five Minutes later Lenny had found "Pong" and was playing it online. David watched him, having nothing better to do. When the score was "Computer: 4/Player: 8" he joined his brother in sleep. David returned to boredom and silently watched the computer win every round until the score was "Computer: 54/Player: 8." Then something slid onto his lap. it was a note that Read "Bored?" David looked behind him, coming face to face with Ella. She smiled and he knew she had gave the note. He dug a pencil out of his pocket and wrote "Yeah. Will this ride ever end?" She wrote back "In about seven hundred years, I guess." That forced a bit of a smile from him. For the next few hours they played Tic-Tac-Toe, I spy, and other games. But by the time Pong's score was "Computer: 1,423/Player: 8" she and him were both asleep.

...........................******...........................

David was jolted awake by an alarm sounding. He was pretty groggy and tried to sleep some more. But the constant alarm wouldn't let him. As the fog in his head cleared, he realized that the Alarm meant something was wrong. Sure enough, when he looked out the window, he saw a giant cliff straight ahead. They were going to crash!

LittleZbot · Post by **LittleZbot** » Fri Jul 16, 2010 9:16 pm

TP.

Comments, anyone?

MyNameIsKooky · Post by **MyNameIsKooky** » Fri Jul 16, 2010 9:20 pm

That plane has a bad pilot.

LittleZbot · Post by **LittleZbot** » Sat Jul 17, 2010 2:47 am

Actually, It didn't. You'll see what happened in the Second chapter. Suggestions, by the way, are welcome if PMed. Note that any posted on this topic or any other will not be used. They have to be PMed.

Nobody · Post by **Nobody** » Sat Jul 17, 2010 9:00 pm

LittleZbot wrote:Suggestions, by the way, are welcome if PMed. Note that any posted on this topic or any other will not be used.

I suggest the plane crashes!

Marinus · Post by **Marinus** » Sat Jul 17, 2010 11:16 pm

Nobody wrote:I suggest the plane crashes!

Don't you like this story, so that you want to end it before it even began?

No, because it's a fantasy story, I suggest that David plays the hero, runs to the cockpit, finding the pilot who's fainted or has a heart attack, and David rescues the plane and passengers by making an emergency landing on a nearby airport.

Nobody · Post by **Nobody** » Sat Jul 17, 2010 11:39 pm

I was suggesting it in the topic so it wouldn't happen, I don't want this to be a cliche story where people survive a plane crash.

Marinus · Post by **Marinus** » Sun Jul 18, 2010 12:12 am

I see. (To be honest I hadn't read well before, about posting in the topic, or PMing) So if we want something to happen, we PM, and if we want something not to happen, we post it here.

Well, in a fantasy story I want to be surprised, (real life is a different story of course) so, when I have an idea, I post it here, to make sure it happens different then I think.

MyNameIsKooky · Post by **MyNameIsKooky** » Sun Jul 18, 2010 12:13 am

This gives me an idea.

I SUGGEST THAT DAVID DOESN'T WAKE THE PILOT UP FROM HIS NAP TO STEER AWAY FROM THE CLIFF! Which makes me wonder why he was napping in the first place.

Marinus · Post by **Marinus** » Sun Jul 18, 2010 12:26 am

Funny idea Kooky, but I wonder if that's the right way.

MyNameIsKooky · Post by **MyNameIsKooky** » Sun Jul 18, 2010 12:28 am

I wonder what LittleZbot will think of all this when he comes back online.

Marinus · Post by **Marinus** » Sun Jul 18, 2010 12:54 am

Me too. But I think a storyteller should tell his/her own story, not much dependent on what other people say.

MyNameIsKooky · Post by **MyNameIsKooky** » Sun Jul 18, 2010 1:25 am

Hopefully it won't be cliche like the plane crash thingy. Ah, well.

TheoX · Post by **TheoX** » Sun Jul 18, 2010 1:56 am

I like the cliffhanger, and the above discussion has been very amusing.

maxnick · Post by **maxnick** » Sun Jul 18, 2010 11:23 pm

MyNameIsKooky wrote:I SUGGEST THAT DAVID DOESN'T WAKE THE PILOT UP FROM HIS NAP TO STEER AWAY FROM THE CLIFF!

This turning into a backwards Txtventure...

MyNameIsKooky · Post by **MyNameIsKooky** » Sun Jul 18, 2010 11:29 pm

maxnick wrote:
MyNameIsKooky wrote:I SUGGEST THAT DAVID DOESN'T WAKE THE PILOT UP FROM HIS NAP TO STEER AWAY FROM THE CLIFF!
This turning into a backwards Txtventure...

Exactly.

LittleZbot · Post by **LittleZbot** » Mon Jul 19, 2010 9:42 pm

Here's what I think of it: Ha Ha.

I have a couple good ideas for my story, and just so you know, the plane DOES crash.

Now I would like to hear you opinions on which one should be why the plane crashes:

A: Bad guys from below shoot is in certain spots, causing it to lose control.(More epicish)
B: The snoring from Leonard distracted the driver.(more funny)

Note: You must PM me what you think. If it is posted, then it won't count.

Another Note: Some of the stuff that has been posted here MIGHT happen, because they play a part in the plot.(Such as the plane crashing)

Soon, instead of releasing the next chapter, I'll tell about the enemies. And then I will release the second one.

Marinus · Post by **Marinus** » Mon Jul 19, 2010 9:50 pm

LittleZbot wrote:Another Note: Some of the stuff that has been posted here MIGHT happen, because they play a part in the plot.(Such as the plane crashing)

That's good! Don't let anyone distract you from the story you had in mind.

About the rest; I'll wait and see.