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Hello guys. I am new to the forum and i just now started making a new hub with the wonderland editor 3.00. The full name is "Wonderland Adventures: Breaking the Portal". The Story is:
"The Thwarts strikes again into the wonderland and we need to break their portal. This portal is from Barren to the Void World. We need all 7 magic stinkers to break the portal such as breaking the void crystal in Planet of Z-Bots game."

If you have ideas You will help me so much.


I will post some photos later.

Good luck!

Here's some photos i made a collage

I will post a DEMO if you want when i make 10-15 adventures. Now i have 4

Welcome to the forum, nasko222!

nasko222 wrote: Fri Jul 13, 2018 3:43 pm The Thwarts strikes again

Huh. Interesting... Since the Thwarts ultimately became good, either this will take place in an alternate dimension, or the Thwarts have "cousins" that we don't know about that are still evil. I'll keep an eye out on this.

rainbowgamer wrote: Sat Jul 14, 2018 12:55 am
Huh. Interesting... Since the Thwarts ultimately became good, either this will take place in an alternate dimension, or the Thwarts have "cousins" that we don't know about that are still evil. I'll keep an eye out on this.

I can change the NPC from Thwart to Troll or Something

Guys i will post a DEMO 1 Tomorrow or Tonight

DEMO 1 RELEASED http://www.mediafire.com/file/5jlivq1s7 ... 1.zip/file

If you like this hub i will continue progressing DEMO 2,3,4.... And Full Release

Please if you download leave a rate because this is my first project

1 - Very bad
2 - Bad
3 - Ok
4 - Good
5 - Nice hub

So, ahm.

I really think that's some stuff missing in this hub.

• The story. Man, in the first time that I was here, my dialogue was horrible. The thing is that I don't recommend doing hubs
  so early, because if you do it, a bunch of aspects go down hill. Make a linear story: name the characters, make they introduce,
  do secondary levels, make the dialogues make sense. If you wanna make a story parallel to Wa1, make it make sense.

• The Levels. Use. Your. Imagination. This is a crucial step in this forum. Make they fun. That's why I don't recommend doing hubs
  so early, because the more and more that you post/create individual adventures, more that advance, and more you create better stuff.

So, to pick some inspiration, I recommend: Doing singular levels; design it, to make it more realistic, if in a natural place, or more straight,
if you make a city place; pick inspiration from other's adventures/hubs, like Paradise Quest, or our adventures.

Maybe you can do better, if do it right. 2.

I will make an individual adventures.

I'm personally going to shy away from numbered ratings, but I'll still give my feedback. As Guilherme said, there definitely are some things that need to be worked on. Like he said, I'd mainly suggest focusing on the plot and the area/aesthetic design. I think the plot could certainly use some more development - throughout the whole demo, it's too quick and therefore undeveloped. For example, perhaps the player could start by exploring a bit? Make a friend or two, collect some gems, save some wee Stinkers, or something like that? By the time things go wrong in the story, I've barely had the chance to process my surroundings. Another beef I had is with the areas - generally speaking, too much open space is something worth avoiding.

That being said, don't take this too harshly - for your first work, it's pretty good! Though the levels aren't that complicated, they are pretty varied and satisfying to get through, and you manage to incorporate a variety of environments. I second Guilherme's advice though; as they say, practice makes perfect.

Check my individual adventures if you want.